The lavender sky hints at warmth, maybe. The sun might decide to burn through the June gloom, but I doubt it - the lavender will give way to gun-metal gray and stay that way till the sun decides to peek through the cloud cover on his way to bed, maybe then a nice sliver of red. The air smells damp and moldy, I hate that smell. My lips are dry; I'm so out of shape - ugh salt. Why do I walk down here every morning? My nipples are already at home they're sticking out so far. I hate sand, I hate the way the sand sticks to everything and chafes; and I really hate that goddamn slime ball staring at my tits. Everyone assumes you like to surf and frolic like Gidget; but I really hate everything to do with this damn place - so what if I was born here? I suppose I should sit here and meditate for a while - get into my "zen zone"; but what's the point? My deep breaths will give way to snores because I'm NOT in the right mindset.
What the hell is that? AAACK! Nothing like a good dry heave in the morning. I hate how the wind changes on a dime, and brings god knows what to unsuspecting nostrils. Dead fish is one thing, but that is nasty - rotten body odor and...opium den? Seriously, where is that coming from? Up on the dunes? God I hate this chug - up, up, up...it seems never-ending. Up, up, up...did I mention I hate sand? Holy shit! Are those legs? The buzzing finally registers, the buzzing...Oh! Fuck! Thousands of bees just noticed me, and I'm too close for comfort...I'm going to die, I don't have my EPI pen!
Hope you enjoyed this, I'm number 129 and you can "like" me by clicking HERE
Hope you enjoyed this, I'm number 129 and you can "like" me by clicking HERE
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Interesting take on the challenge!! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI'm entry #5
I liked the first person pov. I wonder who the leg belonged to?
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Moody Writing
@mooderino
no.79
Almost missed this. The contest is over, right?
ReplyDeleteGlad you posted this. Good job.
Were you in a bad mood when you wrote this?
lol
Someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed this morning, but that makes your character all the more interesting. Great environment you established here! :)
ReplyDeleteNice mood. And by nice, I mean I can tell what kind of week you've been having.
ReplyDeleteI hope you feel better soon.
Ouch, that didn't end well for her!
ReplyDeleteI love this -- the annoyance at the beginning, and the very unexpected ending! Great job.
ReplyDeleteMine is #25.
Great twist at the end and so different from everyone else's. Mine is #56
ReplyDeleteStrong voice. Really appeals to the senses.
ReplyDeleteHey I'm supposed to tell you that you've moved on to the next round! Congrats!
ReplyDeleteOooh, I love the use of the first person here. Really makes the scene vivid, and boy, do you pack a punch! Lovely work!
ReplyDelete@Everyone: Thanks for the positive feedback! I have a question (although since this is the last challenge I probably should've asked this before!) I "like" every entry that I like...am I only suppose to pick one? Just wanting some clarification for the future, as I plan to participate if Rach does a fourth campaign! :)
ReplyDeletesuch a charming person...maybe the bees will consider her too nasty to sting.
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