The imago of my grandfather shattered under hypnosis, when the truth was finally revealed. My memory suffered a lacuna that was filled by the revelation that he had known what George was doing to me. How does one’s psyche block that out so completely?
Should I confront him when I arrive home? Should I try to pretend that nothing has changed?
The knocking from the engine block told me I’d have more time to think. After calling the tow truck, waiting for thirty minutes and suffering through the noxious stench of the driver...I am home, but what is home now?
I realize that I am walking toward his room, I don’t know what I’ll say or do. The miasma in my soul at the prospect of entering that dark room - where I know he sits - is causing extreme dizziness.
Oh. My. God. I find I can do nothing but oscitate at the room before me. There is blood everywhere, the jagged edge to the mirror points up toward the ceiling and is protruding from his throat.
Synchronicity was my friend when it allowed my car to break down and give me an alibi.
I’m glad he’s dead, gleeful even.
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My entry is number #18, please go here and "like" it! Thank you!!! :)
Thursday, September 22, 2011
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Whoa. That was intense. Great imagery! Good job.
ReplyDeleteLove the ending and graphic description. I'm a sucker for gore :D
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the challenge words. Well done!
Wow! That's what you call justice - or maybe you call it karma. The bad guy gets what he deserves, yet it doesn't come from the victim's hand. Nice. ~ Nadja
ReplyDeleteI love it! Karma is a beast, putting it nicely. Wonderful writing.
ReplyDeleteI love "the miasma in my soul" really well done. Mine is #29
ReplyDeleteI love a good all's bad that ends well.
ReplyDeleteJustice is served! Very intense piece. I like her glee at the end.
ReplyDeleteWow, very dark, and very emotional. Good job!
ReplyDeleteMine is #3
Wow. Bone chilling good story you've written here.
ReplyDeleteDidn't see THAT coming! Would be terrific as a start to something longer, too!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting and a different take on this from the others I've read so far. Good work!
ReplyDeleteIf you feel like checking out mine, it's #42. (A bit of "synchronicity" in and of itself, with its echoes of Douglas Adams and Jackie Robinson...)
Glad she had her alibi. I guess you could say that was a happy ending! For one of them.
ReplyDeleteThat was intense, and I'm glad karma came along to give the MC an alibi and take care of the baddie. Good job, Heather! :-)
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ReplyDeleteThank you for the kind words/feedback. Yes, karma is a bitch and that is about as happy an ending as I am inclined to write! I hope that you take the time to "like" my story (#18). I'm going to get back to sick kids for now! :) I'll be touching base with all of you soon!
WOW! Amazing! good on job!
ReplyDeleteI loved this. You did a great job.
ReplyDeleteVery intense - I'm glad for the alibi, too! I'm #34, making my way through the list!
ReplyDeleteOh yes, I love this one.
ReplyDeleteHope the kids are okay.
Wow this is chilling! Love it!
ReplyDeleteWow, interesting and thrilling! I liked this one.
ReplyDeleteWow! That's powerful!
ReplyDeleteWow Heather, that is some powerful imagery! (Good Job!)
ReplyDeleteWow, I wonder who did kill him if she didn't. Very intense.
ReplyDeleteGosh this is a powerful little story. Makes me wonder about what has gone on before. Well done, I like this a lot.
ReplyDeleteI love your description and imagery. Tough topic too.
ReplyDeleteWow! We have a lot in common [I'm guessing] I loved this story..
ReplyDeleteGreat job Heather. Very emotional with a satisfying ending. Makes me want to read more - like who actually killed him. Well done!
ReplyDeleteIntense. Great imagery and I'm left wanting to know more. Good job with those tricky words.
ReplyDeleteWhat a powerful ending! Great work, Heather. :D
ReplyDeleteVery intense and well done. I'm going to follow you because I think we have some things in common. Mine is #146 if you want to check it out.
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed this. I'm voting for it now. I'm 125.
ReplyDeleteLots of emotion in this piece, with a surprise ending. You had me completely rooting for this character!
ReplyDeleteWow. Chilling piece that really toys with the readers emotions. Powerful stuff.
ReplyDeletePowerful words. I feel a truth behind these words. Good job.
ReplyDelete#188
oooo so very dark. And yet the justice of it all... Nice job!
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Outstanding piece of flash! Tells the entire story in just a few paragraphs. I think it's harder to write flash or short stories than novels because with those two genres, you have to be succinct--not something most writers are good at.
ReplyDeleteWow! What an ending! Great entry.
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